Self-Introduction Letter (UPDATED)
Subject: Introducing Kristine
Dear Professor Blackstone,
My name is Kristine Yap, a Year 1 student in your Critical Thinking and Communicating Module, and I am writing to introduce myself and share a bit about who I am. I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic and attained my Diploma in Mechanical Engineering in 2019, I soon after stepped into the workforce, gaining about 3-4 months of experience as a Full-time Associate Engineer, before deciding to pursue my degree in Mechanical Engineering.
One of my communication strengths is providing empathic feedback. Being a camp coach, I felt the need to give constructive criticism and praise in a way that acknowledges the feelings of not only my kids but to any individual. This helps maintain positive relationships while addressing issues effectively. On the other hand, a communication weakness I realised in myself is that I have the tendency to ramble during conversations or explaining certain subjects. I sometimes provide excessive or unnecessary details and veer off-topic which in turn could overwhelm the listener or even lead to confusion.
My goals for developing more effective communication skills in this module is to first work on my weakness. I would want to enhance the clarity and effectiveness of my communication, ensuring that I convey information more efficiently and maintain the listener’s engagement and understanding. Secondly, I would love to improve my non-verbal communication skills. I noticed that I tend to avoid eye contact when communicating with people, through this module, I aim to maintain eye contact with people when engaging with them as this may be essential for building trust and connection, and eventually building on my confidence as well.
‘Live Life’ is my motto. I believe everything happens for a reason and that things or people come and go. I am often the joker of the group and often described as 'lovable' by those who know me. With that, I look forward to utilise and improve my skills to become a better person and I am thrilled to connect with like-minded individuals in and outside of class.
Best Regards,
Kristine
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(UPDATED VERSION)
Subject: Introducing Kristine
Dear Professor Blackstone,
My name is Kristine Yap, a year 1 student in your Critical Thinking and Communicating module, and I am writing to introduce myself and share a bit about who I am. I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic and attained my diploma in Mechanical Engineering in 2019, I soon after stepped into the workforce, gaining about 3-4 months of experience as a full-time Associate Engineer, before deciding to pursue my degree in Mechanical Engineering.
One of my communication strengths is providing empathic feedback. Being a camp coach, I felt the need to give constructive criticism and praise in a way that acknowledges the feelings of not only my kids but to any individual. This helps maintain positive relationships while addressing issues effectively. On the other hand, a communication weakness I realised in myself is that I have the tendency to ramble during conversations or explaining certain subjects. I sometimes provide excessive or unnecessary details and veer off-topic which in turn could overwhelm the listener or even lead to confusion.
My goals for developing more effective communication skills in this module is to first work on my weakness. I would want to enhance the clarity and effectiveness of my communication, ensuring that I convey information more efficiently and maintain the listener’s engagement and understanding. Secondly, I would love to improve my non-verbal communication skills. I noticed that I tend to avoid eye contact when communicating with people, through this module I aim to maintain eye contact with people when engaging with them as this may be essential for building trust and connection and eventually building on my confidence as well.
‘Live Life’ is my motto. I believe everything happens for a reason and that things or people come and go. I am often the joker of the group and often described as 'lovable' by those who know me. Personally, I seek thrills for fun and I enjoy exploring new things or places. Growing from an introverted person in the past to an extrovert now, I realised that sometimes in life, calculated risks can be taken, new things can be explored, your comfort zone can be stepped out of.
With that, I look forward to utilise and improve my skills to become a better person and I am thrilled to connect with like-minded individuals in and outside of class.
Best regards,
Kristine
Kristine, it was a pleasure to read your introductory letter. The letter was well-written, showcasing your unique strengths and weaknesses through the various examples you have provided. A small suggestion would be to expand on your passion in your course of choice, how did it come about and how has it shaped you as a person. I know you can achieve the goals you’ve set out, and I hope to see you become a more confident speaker as well.
ReplyDeleteHi Nathan, thank you for taking the time to comment on my post. I appreciate your valuable insights, it definitely gave me a little boost of confidence.
DeleteHello Kristine, it was nice reading your introductory letter, I did not know that you were actually a camp coach before enrolling into SIT so it was something that is very unique about you. I like how you were not afraid to mention about your weak points and I found it very interesting seeing how you are actually very sociable despite the weaknesses. I hope you are able to overcome it during your time here in SIT.
ReplyDeleteHi Jack, thank you for your comment. I appreciate the good points you pointed out in the letter, your support means a lot, thank you!
DeleteThank you, Kristine, for this informative and, apparently, heart-felt letter. I like the way you share your camp coach experience, connecting that to your empathy, how you open up about your tendency to "provide excessive or unnecessary details and veer off-topic" when you speak, and how you want to address that. I also appreciate you sharing with us your motto: Live life.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I'm curious what that motto means to you beyond people and things coming and going. I also wonder what makes you "the joker" and, as you have said, "lovable." In short, if there is anything in this letter that might be lacking, it would be a note of explanation/evidence.
Your language use here is commendable, but there are a few areas of weakness:
1. sentence structure
-- I noticed that I tend to avoid eye contact when communicating with people, through this module, I aim to maintain eye contact with... > (comma splice) ?
2. overuse of caps:
-- Pls look at the first paragraph.
-- Best Regards, > Best regards,
That's all minor stuff. I look forward to learning more of the details of who you are as our discussions move forward.
Best wishes,
Brad
Thank you Prof, for the constructive feedback! I hoped you know a little more about me now :) I appreciate comments made and have made adjustments to them accordingly. Thank you once again for your uplifting comment!
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